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oday the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree with these views?

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There is no shortage of controversial
education
 in our modern society. It is true that
education
 means a lot to
people
 in our modern world.
Moreover
, today's growing demand for globalization emphasizes its importance. For some
people
,
education
 is important, for ,others it is not important, it is left to personal opinion. The problem with
education
 is that
people
's ideas about
education
 are not yet fully formed. On the one hand ... it's good for children and humanity.
Moreover
, as some argue, the thoughts of
people
 living in remote parts of the world prove that ... is not important. One of the main reasons for
this
 is,
for example
, a different way of thinking and a different outlook. If the labour capacity of humanity increases, the development potential will
also
 increase.
On the other hand
, I agree that we have several options in terms of alternatives because I believe that ... is not only interesting for me but for everyone. A short experience shows that if we study about ..., we should shed light on the path of adults and children with what we learn. In conclusion, it is confirmed once again that ... is a useful alternative for the development of the nation.
In addition
, it is recommended to classify different types of ... and it is important for association.
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