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An increasing number of people are buying whta they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online?

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In today's society, as the world becomes flourish in technology, modern electronic devices are growing popular.
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, a lot of
people
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 are obsessed with online shopping
instead
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 of buying at supermarkets, stores etc. In
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 essay, I will present my opinions on the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping. In the first stage, no one cannot live without the internet for a long time for their livings. They need to buy not only artificial accessories but
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 for living. So, they try to purchase the items online whatever they want. As an advantage, it will alleviate the shopping time and easy to shop without paying any attention to staff like at the market. The second thing is easy to purchase because of online payment systems.
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, whatever who we are, we can do window shopping even expensive things that we cannot afford easily.
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, If
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 use their phones or laptops to find out the things that they want, they can find them just in a few minutes on a shopping website.
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, online ordering may get some errors,
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, sizes, colours and designs may not be identical to what we order online. Another point that we need to remember is delivery charges.
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,
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 purchasing process is easy, using too much money declines their income money. Plus, shopping makes
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 feel relaxed but obsession may happen in depression. The main thing that
people
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 need to paramount is there are a lot of
people
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 who want money from others by lying . All in all,
people
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 should think about the benefits and cons of both options and select the strategy that best suits their goals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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