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The government should allocate more funding to teaching sciences rather than other sunbjects in order for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree?

#government #sciences #sunbjects #country #progress
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There is a conflicting view on whether
sciences
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 should be the sole focus of government finance compared to other
subjects
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 because of their role in developing a nation. In my opinion, I completely disagree with the argument because other disciplines have crucial roles in developing a
child
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's education and the economy might suffer in an imbalanced job market. Despite the importance of
sciences
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, other
subjects
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 as mathematics, arts and more contribute to the holistic education of a
child
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.
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 is because lessening the attention to other
subjects
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 will not lead to understanding more the
sciences
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 it is the backbone of all other disciplines.
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, the complexity of math help improves critical thinking and problem-solving skills
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 arts aim to preserve the history and cultural identity of a nation. Each subject has a significant role in developing a
child
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 to become an asset and contributor to the betterment of society. Another reason is, if science is the only subject encouraged by the students,
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 will create an imbalance in the economy.
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, children that want to explore and are interested to learn other things will not be given a choice on what they are passionate about which could cause more detrimental effects later on in life.
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, a high number of them will be unemployed since there are no high vacancies for science-related jobs
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 other working sectors will have an increased number of job vacancies as there are more openings for them. In conclusion, I disagree that the funding of the government should not only focus on
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 since other
subjects
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 have their own contribution to the well-being of a
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 and
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 could lead to an imbalance economy of the job market.
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