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These days many countries help other countries by giving free food, medical, or other aid. What are the benefits and drawbacks of this for countries that give and receive.

#countries #food #aid
In
this
 era, the relationship between
countries
 is improving. The Governments are coming up with
new
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 committee to help their neighbour
countries
 in multiple ways. In these looming paragraphs,
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 will discuss the pros and cons for the
nations
 that are helping other
countries
. To commence with, all those
nations
 that are helping other
countries
 will create new opportunities to share businesses for the future.
Moreover
, It will help in the betterment of the society and upcoming generation. There are some
nations
 where the rate of terrorism significantly went down, because of good relationships between the governments. Recently, the US has built
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 relationship with
Ukrain
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Ukraine
, the economy of Ukraine collapsed
due to
 war, where
US
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 helped them by sending their medical teams
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 and
provided
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 food and money to their people.
Thus
,
this
 small initiative helped Ukraine to recover its economy and win the war.
However
, it is an undeniable fact that sometimes helping other
nations
 can result
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 a big disaster, because of their corrupt governments, they gain the trust of other
nations
 and
then
 promote negativity with their neighbour
countries
.
Countries
 like Pakistan and Afghanistan always take help from the US, India and China but they give protection to terrorists in their
countries
 which cannot be easily controlled. In a nutshell, Each aspect has its pros and cons.
Although
 there are chances that
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helping the neighbour
countries
 can do wrong things and promote negativity, I believe helping other
nations
 will directly impact
on
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the future generation and it will help in reducing
the
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violence.
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