Some say that music, art and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at the primary level. Do you agree or disagree?

INTRODUCTION It is
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believed
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of people that teaching art, music and drama is as important as teaching other school subjects, especially at the primary stage. In my opinion, those people are correct and I
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agree with them. MAIN BODY 1 The first thing to consider, is that art develops
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creativity, particularly at
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have a lot of inspiring and genius ideas from our kids.
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, it can reveal hidden talents inside of us, so more people will be engaged in making new content. Because it becomes harder to be creative
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modern musicians started learning
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it would
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impossible to have so many talented singers and
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in our society without teaching music and art to our little children. MAIN BODY 2 CONCLUSION PLAN 1) Reveals
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talents and creativity. 1)children are more educated (wide world view) 2) 2) Nobody studies it in schools and it is not important 1) it is not correct to rate creativity 2) more stress and more homework for students
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • holistic development
  • fostering
  • emotional intelligence
  • problem-solving skills
  • cultural awareness
  • curriculum
  • engaging
  • memorable
  • nurture
  • talents
  • core subjects
  • academic
  • professional success
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