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The graph below presents the employment patterns in the usa between 1930 and 2010

The graph below presents the employment patterns in the usa between 1930 and 2010
The line graph displays the quota of
employment
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 in different sectors in America between 1930 and 2010.
Overall
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, out of the four sectors of
employment
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, farming, fishing and foresting was the highest employer at the beginning of the period but saw a consistent decline over the years , industrial and technical grew modestly , whiles
sales
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 and
office
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 and other
services
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 fluctuated throughout the given period. There was a steady decline in the
rate
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 of recruitment in the Agriculture
sector
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 with the highest
employment
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rate
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 recorded in 1930 of almost 80
people
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 and dropped over the 80years period till it recorded the lowest
employment
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rate
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 in 2010 nearly 0. The technical
sector
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 began employing in 1930 with about 5 staff and rose steadily till they recorded their highest recruitment in 2010 of about 30
people
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. The industrial
sector
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on the other hand
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 was actively employed in the year 1940 with nearly 0 employees but rose consistently till they recorded their highest number of employees in 2010 of about 30
people
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 as well.
Sales
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 and offices with other
services
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 fluctuated in their recruitment
rate
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 throughout the years. With the
sales
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 and
office
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sector
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 attaining their lowest enrollment
rate
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 in 1940 of nearly 0 personnel, other
services
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 recorded their highest hiring of almost 20
people
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 in the same year. In 2010, the
sales
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 and
office
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sector
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 recorded its highest
employment
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rate
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 of about 20
people
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 whilst other
services
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 employed nearly half of the number employed by the
sales
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 and
office
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sector
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, sales, office, services, rate, sector, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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