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It is difficult for people who live in cities to get enough physical exercise. What causes and solutions can be taken to solve the problem?

In
this
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 current world we live in,
people
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 are already not getting ample physical
activities
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 especially those who are living in the
city
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.
This
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 essay will explore and enumerate some common reasons why
residents
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 in urban areas are having a hard time doing physical exercises.
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, a number of solutions will be discussed.
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,
people
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 in the
city
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 have very hectic schedules, and
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 is the most common reason why they cannot perform physical
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. The
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city centric
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 lifestyle is oftentimes super competitive and requires very demanding jobs that force most urban
residents
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 to skip exercises.
People
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 will rather use their spare time to take rest and recover after a long day of work.
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, cities are
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 overcrowded with buildings and there is a scarcity of open spaces where
people
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 can work out, and
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 adds up as another reason that makes running and jogging difficult.
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,
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residents
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 tend to ignore their leisurely movement to have an active lifestyle.
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,
this
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 problem has solutions that are
also
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 easily doable. Employers can encourage their workers to do physical
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 even inside the workplace. The human resources department can organize simple exercises before the start or in between working hours. In Coca-Cola Philippines
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, they have the daily 5-minute "quick movement" in the morning before they kick off the day of work.
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, the local government should make good urban planning to include open spaces where
residents
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 can do leisure
activities
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 to live actively. In conclusion, maintaining an active lifestyle
such
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 as doing physical exercise can be difficult in
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 busy world but solutions are
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 available to help and encourage
people
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 to exercise.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyles
  • desk-bound jobs
  • fast-paced urban life
  • conveniences
  • physical exertion
  • barrier
  • densely populated
  • pollution
  • safety concerns
  • urban planning
  • pedestrian areas
  • cycle lanes
  • accessible
  • workplace wellness programs
  • subsidize
  • financial barriers
  • public awareness
  • incorporate
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