The diagram shows the manufacturing process of making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the manufacturing process of making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates manufacturing
sugar
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from the sugarcane plant.
Overall
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, the process has seven
steps
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, the main
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: growing and harvesting
then
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,the production process itself consists of five
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: crushing, purifying, evaporating, separating,
finally
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, drying and cooling. The process starts with
sugar
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cane growing.It takes from 12 to 18 months to have fully grown sugarcane plants.
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, harvesting can be done by a special machine or can be done manually by the farmers. Those two
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are done on the farm
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the following
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usually takes place in the factory. After that, the first step in the production, which is crushing. A special machine is used to crush the
sugar
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canes and produce juice. The extracted juice is purified through a limestone filter. The purified juice is heated in an evaporator to change it into syrup.
The next step is
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separating the
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crystals from syrup through a centrifuge machine.
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, cooling and drying the separated
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to have the
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in the form that we use everyday.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, steps with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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