The diagram shows the manufacturing process of making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates manufacturing
sugar
from the sugarcane plant. Use synonyms
Overall
, the process has seven Linking Words
steps
, the main Use synonyms
steps
: growing and harvesting Use synonyms
then
,the production process itself consists of five Linking Words
steps
: crushing, purifying, evaporating, separating, Use synonyms
finally
, drying and cooling.
The process starts with Linking Words
sugar
cane growing.It takes from 12 to 18 months to have fully grown sugarcane plants. Use synonyms
Then
, harvesting can be done by a special machine or can be done manually by the farmers. Those two Linking Words
steps
are done on the farm Use synonyms
while
the following Linking Words
steps
usually takes place in the factory.
After that, the first step in the production, which is crushing. A special machine is used to crush the Use synonyms
sugar
canes and produce juice. The extracted juice is purified through a limestone filter. The purified juice is heated in an evaporator to change it into syrup. Use synonyms
The next step is
separating the Linking Words
sugar
crystals from syrup through a centrifuge machine. Use synonyms
Lastly
, cooling and drying the separated Linking Words
sugar
to have the Use synonyms
sugar
in the form that we use everyday.Use synonyms
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