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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution #measures
Some
people
 believe that if the price of petrol increases,
problems
 like heavy vehicle traffic or contamination are going to be solved. I somewhat agree
to
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this
 statement but,
additionally
, I think there are other measures that might be useful. Making fuel more pricy is only one way to approach the goal of a clean environment,
,
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 it's going to make a big change in our lives. On one side, yes, there won't be so many cars on the streets and the air won't be so dirty, but, on the other side, the business world and local economics will suffer.
For example
, a delivery company will struggle to perform
due to
 raised petrol costs and it may even bankrupt. In my opinion, there are more approachable methods that can impact those
problems
such
 as governmental laws, public information and familiarizing with those
problems
.
For instance
, in France there is a law that says cars with plates, finishing with even numbers can be driven on certain days of the week, and the opposite. Educational movies or series can be made
due to
 affect
people
's moral values and desires to help the environment. Informing
people
 and counting on their right decisions is very important and can have positive results. Another example is the population of Nederland, one of the most "greener" countries in the world. There
people
 ride mostly bicycles and
this
 is their own choice, as they know the risks and decide to take action against the most popular car-related
problems
. In conclusion, I believe that
people
 should get a chance to prove their willingness to make a change before taking
such
 drastic measures as increasing fuel prices.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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