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As major cities around the world are growing, so are their problems. What are these problems for young people living in cities? What are possible solutions for these problems?

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Nowadays, in the hectic pace of growing
city
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 life around the world, their problems and adverse effects are inevitable
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 numerous at the same time . there seem to be two main problems which are stemming from
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 situation and
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 two steps it could be taken to address it fully. Possible troubles are traffic jams and limitations on educational systems which must be provided for the young generation.
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, with the expansion in
city
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 life there would be great growth in the population which results in a busier street with cars and people
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 higher traffic rates during rush hours are highly expected.
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, more individuals in a
city
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 need a better educational system to provide academic learning for
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 more colleges and schools are needed compared to before. Turning to possible solutions, the first coming ideas are better
city
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 infrastructure which could be helpful for both traffic issues and enough educational places. Primarily,
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 to prepare the appropriate infrastructure of a
city
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 better highways or better public transportation for handling the commutement of
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 population.
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, considering a good amount of government budget for building new schools or universities is essential. In conclusion, the leading obstacles are crowded cities with transportation and academic problems.
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, the possible solutions are relied on building a well-designed infrastructure because it involves more roads and schools or even hospitals or any other type of facilities that are helpful in living in a mega
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 century.
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