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Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their family. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #children #time
While
 family members play essential roles in the early life of their descendants regarding their characteristics and lifestyles, in my perspective, the positive impacts provoked by the time spent with peers should not be overlooked,
due to
 the acquisition of important
experience
 for being more independent. On the one hand, young people are able to inherit
tradition
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the tradition
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 from members
in
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 families for unique culture being passed down to the younger generation, on top of that, they are able to get
familier
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familiar
 with certain professional areas to be more competitive compared to others.
For example
, many doctors
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 up in the family, that have many relatives
work
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 in correlative professional fields,
who
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and
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 are able to share valuable
experience
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experiences
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.
On the other hand
, children who stay in
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their confort
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confort
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comfort
 zones for too long could miss the chance of gaining new
experience
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experiences
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 and updated information,
along with
 it, being
indepandand
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independent
. In my perspective, it is crucial for students to study in educational institutions with peers and professional educators. It helps them to cultivate social skills and be able to deal
difficulties
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 by themselves. Take early education institutions in Japan as an example, children will learn essential capacities to take care of themselves, including folding clothes, using
dinning
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dining
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 sets, and tidying
room
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, compared to at home where
eveything
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everything
 will be done for them. To summarise, it is true that people in a family have
great
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 influence on their children, and could provide crucial
advises
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 in life and future careers.
However
, in my opinion, I tend to
agree
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 the opponents who believe youth should spend more time with friends
in
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of
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 similar ages and teachers on campuses to have a wide range of
experience
 and latest knowledge.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fosters
  • Sense of belonging
  • Transmission
  • Cultural and moral values
  • Overdependence
  • Hinder
  • Social development
  • Autonomy
  • Well-rounded development
  • Invaluable
  • Emotional and moral development
  • Self-reliance
  • Diverse interests
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