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Globalisation is positive for economies, but it’s negative side should not be ignored. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that
globalization
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 has positive effects ,particularly on economies, but we cannot avoid its main negative effect on the environment. In our essay, we will be discussing both the advantages and the negative side effects of it. At the outset, Even though internationalism has some economic benefits, it exerts some drawbacks, and we have to highlight them.
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, the usage of all transportation means
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 cargo, ships and planes will rise which could result in environmental pollution because they produce harmful fumes into the air.
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,
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, if we want to make a new road, we have to destroy lots of forests, wetlands, and water resources. So, we cannot leave these disadvantages, and our best should be done to solve them. In sharp contrast to
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,
globalization
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 has a tremendous positive effect on economies all over the globe.
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, the rate of the industry for various products will be enhanced in each country because of the competition, as anyone wants to achieve a lot of profits by getting a foreign currency.
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 to that, it will be
so
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easy to share ideas and activities between people from different countries which enhance the rate of progress in various fields of life.
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, the
world economic forum
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World Economic Forum
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 researched and calculated that
globalization
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 accounted for 80% of the development of the economy all over the world. In conclusion,
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, I believe that
globalization
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 is considered one of the most important factors responsible for the progress of our planet, we
could not
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 ignore its negative consequences, and so all people have to cooperate to get rid of any problem caused by it.

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task response
You have presented a clear opinion and addressed the question fully. However, the main points could be further elaborated to provide a more comprehensive response.
coherence cohesion
Your essay maintains a logical structure and presents clear introduction and conclusion. Work on developing a stronger connection between the paragraphs to enhance overall coherence.
lexical resource
Your use of vocabulary is varied and appropriate, but be cautious of word choice and accuracy to convey precise meanings.
grammatical range
You demonstrate a good command of grammar with varied sentence structures. However, pay attention to subject-verb agreement and article use to enhance accuracy.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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