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Rich countries often gave money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore developed country should give other type of help to the poorer countries rather than financial aid. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Develop
nations
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 frequently provides
aids
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 to
third world
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nations
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 in
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form
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the form
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 of
money
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. In many
cases
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 wealth does not support in
progress
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the progress
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 of these
type
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types
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countries
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. So, it would be better to help them in other ways. I personally disagree with the financial support for the growth. Financial help often got wasted if it does not get used in
proper
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a proper
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 way by
government
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the government
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.
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example
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 during the war in Afghanistan, many
countries
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had
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contributed
huge
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amount
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amounts
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 of
money
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 for development, but even after
war
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the war
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condition
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conditions
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 of the
countrymen’s
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 are unchanged. It
also
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 observed that
due to
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 mismanagement financial help can be used in
wrong
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the wrong
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 way.
Best
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for
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this
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 is terrorism. Terrorist groups always used that
money
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 which,
supposed
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is supposed
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 to use for
developments
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development
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.
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,
instead
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 of offering
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money
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,money
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 they can provide help in
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form
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the form
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 of education, medical etc. Just because of
poor
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the poor
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 condition of many
countries
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 of
African
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the African
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 continent so many
nations
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 provide
helps
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help
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 in
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form
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the form
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 of food and shelter for their locals. In many
ways
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 easy
money
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 can
misguides
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misguide
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 the
man power
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manpower
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 of any country. It makes
habit
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a habit
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 for them
instead
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 of doing any type of productive
works
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work
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 they seeks help from other and if they do not get
such
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 help they will start blaming
government
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the government
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.
To conclude
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, helping in
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form
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 of
money
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 is not the only
ways
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way
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 for developing
nations
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. Mismanagement of
money
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 by any higher authority can interrupt growth.
Money
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 help can even produce slow growth
of
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in
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 some
countries
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. Aids can be in any
form
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; it can be in
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form
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the form
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 of education, medicine, food, shelter etc.

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