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Theme : Some people feel that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is a better in the countryside.

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It
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a frequent topic of discussion that many
people
 argue that life is
a
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better in the
city
while
 others feel that it is better to
prefer
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 live in  the countryside. In my opinion
first
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 idea a good. Few
people
 prefer to live in the countryside because the villagers are very healthy and strong
also
 the air of the village is
also
 clean.
This
 is the reason there are many plants, trees and gardens in the village.
This
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 plants and trees clean the air. So since there are not many harmful fumes.
On the other hand
 , the majority argue that life is
a
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better in the
city
. Because there are all conditions in the
city
 .So since a good education gets a good job . Most of the
people
 living in the
city
 are well salary  .Because the state creates all conditions for them .Many rural
people
also
 come to the
city
 to work because of the good salary. In
summary
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although
 rural life is good in my opinion, living in the
city
 is good for the development of
this
 country.
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