Some people think computer games have negative impacts on children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Individuals think that computerised
games
have negative impacts on children. But there have some drawbacks and benefits we will discuss both factors coming paragraphs. First and foremost, computer
games
are
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played by kids
more
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then
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two
hour
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per day is very harmful
for
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eyes
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.
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one
of
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Vietnamese guy play video
games
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and lost his eye.
Secondly
,
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children are played computer
games
, they are lazy because sit
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place only.
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young boys and girls are played physical
games
more healthy and strong. On the flip side, some psychologists suggest that video
games
can actually have many benefits, especially bearing in mind that “the nature of these
games
has changed dramatically in the
last
decade, becoming increasingly complex, diverse, realistic, and social in nature”. So, in order to understand the impact video
games
have on children’s development, we need to look at both the positive and the negative effects of these
games
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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