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Many people try to achieve a work-life balance but fail. Why is this happening? What can be done to help people overcome this problem?

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The past and forecasted data
of
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on
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 energy
consumption
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 in the U.S. is depicted on the graph for each type of fuel.
Petrol
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 and
oil
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 account for the lion's share of all utilized resources,
while
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 the utilization
rates
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 for
such
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fuels
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 as nuclear, solar, wind, and hydropower are below 10 quadrillion units both in the past and predicted future.
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, coal and natural gas
consumption
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rates
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 are sandwiched between the
consumption
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rates
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 of fossil and artificial
fuels
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.
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,
petrol
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,
oil
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, and coal
consumption
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 has been gradually increasing and will show an upward trend in the future.
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the
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natural gas utilization has
also
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 been growing, it is predicted to flatten out.
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, the
consumption
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rates
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 for other resources fluctuated with no clear-cut trend.
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,
the
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petrol
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 and
oil
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 utilization is the highest among all types
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fuels
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of fuels
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, and an upward
dynamics
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dynamic
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 is evident in
petrol
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,
oil
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, and coal,
while
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 the
consumption
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rates
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 for other
fuels
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 are predicted to reach a plateau.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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