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The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999. ▪️Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999. ▪️Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the number of people who visited the
UK
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, and
British
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 people who visited other countries in the period of 20 years from 1979 to 1999.
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, the bar graph shows the most famous countries as tourist destinations among
the
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UK
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 residents in the
year
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 1999.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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British
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 residents’ tendency to travel was more than others’ tendency to visit the
UK
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.
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, France and Spain were the most popular places as visiting destinations for the
UK
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 nation. 11
million
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British
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 tended to travel in the
year
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 1979,
this
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 number increased slightly until 1984 to 20
million
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, after that, it experienced a significant rise to reach a peak of 54
million
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at the end
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 of the period.
On the other hand
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, 10
million
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 overseas nations tended to travel to the United Kingdom in 1979 and
this
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 number increased slowly until the
year
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 1987 to about 12
million
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;
then
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, it had a moderate rise to more than 25
million
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 visitors in 1999. As
it
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can be easily seen, more than 11
million
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British
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 enjoyed travelling to France in 1999.
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, Spain as the second most popular visiting place among the
UK
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 people had approximately 10
million
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 visitors of
British
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 at that
year
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.
In addition
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, Turkey, Greece, and the USA had about 2,3 and 4
million
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British
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 visitors respectively in 1999.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, british, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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