You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, •explain what you like about the cafeteria •say what is wrong with it •suggest how it could be improved

#college #cafeteria #lunchtime #improvements #magazine #•explain #•say #•suggest

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you with regard to the

cafeteria

,which is located at Gaziantep College. I am Sinan, and I have been studying at Gaziantep College for the

last

two years. I usually have lunch at the college

cafeteria

. I would like to express that it has a variety of foods, and these foods are quite delicious.

Moreover

, all your staff are incredibly gracious, and they clean the tables fastly every time.

Therefore

, I admire

this

cafeteria

and like to spend time with my friends there.

However

, there is a problem at the

cafeteria

; the ventilation is really inadequate. Its air is awful

due to

the fact that all of the foods' smells are mixed. I will be glad if you renew the ventilation systems.

Thus

, it will be a apply lovely place. Thank you in advance for your time and consideration. Yours sincerely, Sinan Y

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