In some countries an increasing number of people are sufferimg from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree pr disagree with this opinion?

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fast modern life, there is no doubt that our lifestyle affects our lives directly, and one of the most things that affect our lives is fast
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. Some people opine that government has the responsibility to reduce
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phenanomane by
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a higher tax on
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kind of
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others opine the contrary. In my
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I stand with the first concept that believes in the necessity of
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this
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problem because it
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causes
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cases
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many health problems, and I will elaborate on
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in
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following
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with, with
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fast busy life most
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people
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now tend to have
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food
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, because they do not have time to cock healthy
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to themselves,
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they find it easier to eat
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food
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,
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kind of
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contain
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a lot of low
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quality
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, and it affects our health directly, which cause a lot of disease like high pressure and
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disparities
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, people will not stop doing
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and eat
junk
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food
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unless there is a high task on
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kind of
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why it is the government's responsibility to set a higher tax on
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food
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when anyone wants to eat
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food
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they will think many times before they decide to have a meal, in
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we
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guarantee
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junk
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food
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consumption will reduce
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least 50% because not everyone will afford the price of it.
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,
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food
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is the main reason for many diseases,
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the government have to have
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plan to stop
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phenonmen
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phenomenon
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