The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.

The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.
The provided line graph illustrates the
number
of sportsmen who joined the Olympics,
while
the bar graph gives information about the
number
of
participants
in terms of gender in the 88-year
period
, between 1924 and 2012.
Overall
, the
number
of
participants
represented an upward trend throughout the
period
,
while
the
number
of women increased significantly
at the end
of the
period
. Looking at the details, as regards the
number
of males, there was an upward trend in the whole
period
. It stood at 3000 members of the Olympics in 1924 and rose steadily until reaching just under 6000, which made up the biggest
number
of members,
at the end
of the
period
. In terms of attendees of females, there was the same trend with male counterparts. Between 1984 and 2012,
although
their
number
saw a dramatic increase from just over 1000 to just under 5000, the
number
of females was never able to exceed male participant Now turning to the total
number
of
participants
in the games, both charts clearly depicted that the
number
of
participants
went up the whole
period
. It was between 2000 and 4000
participants
in 1924 and increased gradually until reaching over 6000 in 1984. In the following years, it rose sharply and overtook 10000 until reaching more than 10000 in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, participants, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 9 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Olympic Games
  • participants
  • historical context
  • trend
  • exponential growth
  • influence
  • world events
  • diversity
  • technological advancements
  • global
  • gender equality
  • International Olympic Committee (IOC)
  • unity
  • competition
  • athletes
  • entry
  • represent
  • delegation
  • boycotts
  • milestones
  • parity
  • inclusive
  • disciplines
  • legacy
  • sponsorship
  • admission
  • elite sportspeople
  • national pride
  • cultural exchange
  • ambassadors
  • sportsmanship
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