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Some people think visual images (like photographs and videos) can tell information more accurately in a news story, while others think they cannot represent the full story. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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We are now living in the fifth generation of technology where photographs and videos are
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 a vital role to understand a topic .
Although
 some people argue that features like pictures and televised can not express the actual meaning, in my perspective they do represent the full story of
news
. On the one hand, visualization has a great impact on understanding
due to
 numerous reasons.
Firstly
, images like photographs and videos can bear meaning so boldly that it can be said they are a universal source of communication.
For example
, deaf people can not
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 the
news
 presenter's voice , yet they can get the
news
 by watching the footage.
Secondly
, everyone's listening and understanding capacity is not the same, on that point, a pictorial story can be helpful. On top of that, our brain receives visual information more rapidly and remembers it for a long time.
On the other hand
, sometimes we need to know the details of
news
, in that cases, only visual presentation does not clarify the whole.
Also
,
this
 method is not appropriate since blind people can not absorb the article properly.
Moreover
, the different audiences can interpret in different ways,
as a result
, pictures and videos can be misleading sometimes. Another point is that
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 many students take references from
news
 for their study purpose, and they
also
 need details of the information. So, it is better to explain the full story to some spectators. In conclusion, There are various views on broadcasting
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, but in my opinion, visual presentation is more versatile and it can be easily understandable by all ages of inhabitants like children, young and old.
Submitted by Md. Anwar Hossain on

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