The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
The chart illustrates the amount of time spend
the
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on the
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beach
, reading books and visiting places
while
on holiday in Greece in August 2019 by people from China, America, Turkey and
Brazil
.
Overall
, reading books had the highest amount of time among Chinese
visitors
while
travellers from
Brazil
preferred to spend more
hours
at the
beach
and the holiday activities had the least number of
hours
spent visiting places. The
visitors
from China spend 8
hours
reading books as compared to American sightseers who spend only 5
hours
. The tourist from Turkey and
Brazil
spent an equal amount of 4
hours
reading a book. People from
Brazil
enjoyed spending 6
hours
at the
beach
activity
whereas
Turkish people spent 5
hours
. American and Chinese tourists spent 4
hours
and 3
hours
at the
beach
respectively. As for visiting places, all
visitors
from America, China, Turkey and
Brazil
spend fewer
hours
doing leisure activities. Both American and Turkish tourists spent 3
hours
. Brazilian
visitors
only used 2
hours
and Chinese just 1 hour on
this
activity.
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