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the best way to solve the world's environmental problems is increase cost of fuel for car and other vehicle. to what entent do you agree or disagree?

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It is always a heated debate for us that how to deal with the world's environmental problems. Some
people
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 believe that increasing
fuel
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 prices can solve the problems by decreasing the amount of usage. In my opinion,
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 method indeed can make
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 use fewer fossil products to some extent
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 the best way to solve
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 problem is to teach
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 the consequences of using too many fossil products. In recent years, more and more vehicles have emerged on the road, causing severe air pollution around the world.
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 many countries have levelled up the
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 of
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,
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 trend didn't disappear. Specifically, sometimes when the
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 of
fuel
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 was super high, it could control the usage of
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 immediately.
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, it is impossible for governments to maintain high prices for a long time. Once the
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 started to decline,
people
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 tended to drive their own cars again.
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, the
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 of fuels influenced human activities in the short term but it was extremely hard to change the human habit over a long period. To decrease the amount of fossil used by humans forever, the best way is to teach
people
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 that if we emit too much carbon dioxide into the earth, will turn out? It is undeniable that
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 method is tremendously difficult for governments to apply but if we can succeed,
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 can change human habits.
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, if
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 have learned new knowledge, they will take more public transport.
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, they won't buy too many cars,
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 can
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 decrease the fuels that we need to use. In conclusion, it is a simple way to control
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 using fossil products by increasing their prices.
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, teaching
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 how to protect our world is the fundamental method to solve environmental problems.
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