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Childcare has always been of primary concern and importance. Do you think that courses designed to help mothers are necessary or can they acquire the essential knowledge through personal experience? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Taking care of a
child
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 is one of the responsibilities and major concerns of women. Even though we can learn through courses specially curated for
mothers
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 ,I would definitely prefer gaining knowledge through practical experience.
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 helps to understand the
child
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 better and helps in the
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's
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 development Having to nurture a
child
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 , and seeing them grow is a really beautiful journey. When we start spending
time
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 with we get to understand them better. It's different from hearing from others than evaluating yourself.
Mothers
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 will get to know the mindset of the
child
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 ,what their likes or dislikes
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 many subjects they can grasp , and the pace of their learning activities .
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 courses really help
mothers
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 they are specially designed for a group of
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 ,
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 the
child
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 needs individual attention . For ,example if a mother tries to teach her
children
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 a subject they do not like just because it's mentioned in a course , book or following
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mothers
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 impacts negatively on the
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 as it's ,not his favourite task. Spending
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 with
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 taking care of them helps
mothers
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 to bond with them more.
Children
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 will feel free to voice out their concerns so that
mothers
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 will learn to not repeat that next
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.
Mothers
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 can know from
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 to
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 changes in their attitudes can occur to age and can act
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. They can
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 talk help from older generations , no course is a match before their knowledge.
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 Finland is one of the happiest and has the best education system will definitely include activities specifically for youngsters In conclusion, we can say that one's own choices and experience will teach them everything .
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 experience is like a cycle that changes
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 of
child
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-like from infancy to adulthood.
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