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More and more people are eating healthy food and exercising regularly. What are the reasons for that? What can we do to make other people do the same?

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Every day more and more
people
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 are willing to eat healthy
food
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 and do exercises regularly. It is believed that wholesome
food
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 and some activities during the day can keep your body in
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good condition. Let's have a look at the reasons that make
people
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 have an active lifestyle and be in a regime. Healthy
food
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 and regular sport are the
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 for
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good well-being. The recent studies of the University of California showed that most of the retired
people
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in
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the
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age
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 60-80 suffer from
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heart diseases which were caused by the absence of
sport
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 activities during
the
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 whole life. It is proven that the exercises utilize
body's
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the body's
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 flexibility and extend the life expectancy. The wholesome
food
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 plummets the risk of getting cancer.
The recent
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 statistics
shows
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 that the most vicious illness of
XXI
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centure
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century
 is cancer. Even if we have a partial remedy
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 it,
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it doen't
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doen't
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doesn't
 mean that
people
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 shouldn't take care of what they eat. The
food
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, which we consume every day, contains not always healthy fats or sugar.
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modern
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"
food
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 is a source of
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chemicals which can destroy our
body
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bodies
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 from
inside
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the inside
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. Regular exercising can keep you in a great fit. Those, who usually visit a gym twice a week are wary about their
appearence
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appearance
 and how they will look in ten years.
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 recent experiment in the New York Time magazine, where the journalist used the photos of ten random
womens
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women
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 and by using a computer program predicted how they would look
like
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in ten years. The results were staggering. The women couldn't recognize themself and admit that there were their pictures. Suppose, it was a quite good motivation for them.
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,
to make
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 other
people
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to
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follow
the
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 diet and consume
the
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healthy
food
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 can be the
quientessence
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quintessence
 of other
people
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, as it was by the experiment in the New York Time magazine. The potential illnesses and their vicious outcomes can
also
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 make
people
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to
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change
thier
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their
 habits and divert
the
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 life approach. So, the positive effect
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 consuming healthy
food
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 and doing
exercies
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exercises
exercise
 regularly, outweigh all drawbacks.
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