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Many people find it hard to balance their work with other part of their lives. What is the reason for this? How can this problem be overcome?

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Nowadays, developing a career is really important for
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. The quantity of money that you can earn from your job, the importance of your role, and the passion that you feel for your occupation are great motivations to put work in the first place. Unfortunately, sometimes it could be hard to create a good
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 between the
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 spent working and the
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 dedicated to family or hobbies. In
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 essay, I will give arguments to support
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 idea. To start with, it is a big problem for
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 to dedicate a little bit of their
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 to health
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 working these days. Some
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 spend more than 12 hours working and commuting. That leaves them very little
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 to sleep, and make dinner and those who have children would need more
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 to share with their loved ones.
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, as a physical therapist when I talk to my patients I tell them the importance of finding a good
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 by having some
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 to exercise and convince them that they have to create a good
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.
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, after analyzing how life
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 is a problem, lots of companies can propose employees spend four days a week to increase productivity
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 offering them other benefits
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 as more free
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.
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, through
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 method, employers will find out that productivity is higher than if they work five days a week.
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, workers would be happier and healthier because they can spend more
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 with their families and take care of themself.
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,
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 normally struggle to have a
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 between work and personal life.
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 reason, if a company offers a shorter working schedule, workers would have enough
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 to do more personal activities that would make them happier
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 as physical exercise and
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 to spend with their family and friends to
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 their lives.
Submitted by Andrea Barreto on

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