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Some people think it is better for one single legal system throughout the world. Others say countries should have their own law. Discuss both view and give your opinion .

Some people argued that the best
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 that should be implemented is a single legal
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 across the globe,
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 others believed that nations need to have their own
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 law
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 based on their needs and characters. I am convinced that countries should have specialized and own street regulations
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 their need to make it more effective and efficient. I will examine both views in
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, the
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system
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 is really indeed paramount to the state in rule the
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 runs smoothly. There are two major things I identified associated with
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 simplicity and efficiency.
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 with, several countries that have similar characteristic must be regulated by
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 single
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 because it makes it more simple and it does not require many resources to do it and make the
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 more easily implemented across
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border. To illustrate, Malaysia and Indonesia have similar systems and cases, if it becomes
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 will make the extradition of corruption crimes without difficult bureaucracy.
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, it is more efficient since the resources become less than the existing ones because it will decrease human labour and save the cost for another area.
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, despite some benefits offered by a single
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. In my point of view, it has numerous drawbacks to enforce because every nation has its characteristics and different problems.
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, Indonesia consists of almost a thousand sub-ethnic groups and diverse cultures. we can not impose
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 in Medan since the people are tough compared to Yogyakarta which is softer.
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, having an adequate approach will lead to being effective in solving problems and punishing a lawbreaker.
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, it would be able to help judges in enforcing the law based on the people's characters there. In conclusion,
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 legal
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 offers some benefits, I remain firmly convinced that every country should have its own law
system
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 based on its need to make it more efficient and effective because it suits them.

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task response
Ensure that your essay directly addresses the prompt given. Make sure to fully discuss the advantages and disadvantages of a single legal system vs. individual country laws. Also, present a clear opinion on which approach you support and why.
coherence and cohesion
The essay lacks a clear and logical progression of ideas. Use transition words and phrases to connect your ideas and paragraphs more effectively. Additionally, ensure that the introduction and conclusion adequately summarize the main points of the essay.
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