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Is the freedom of speech vital in a free society? agree or disagree

#freedom #speech #society
Firstly
 it is very important to know what
is
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the
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freedom
 of
speech
 means.
Freedom
 of
speech
 is
expression
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our
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 ideas and thoughts in
community
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the community
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 even with mass media. Some
people
 say that
freedom
 of
speech
 is not too important in
society
, because it is very hard to control it. Others say that it is vital for
society
 so that ideas do not go unnoticed. I consider myself to
the
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 second
types
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 of
people
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, so now I want to explain why does
freedom
 of
speech
 important in our life.
Firstly
, it is well
to
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known that
freedom
 of
speech
 gave
to
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society
 extra rights.
People
 can say their own thoughts without any worry for their
lifes
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lives
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.
For example
 North Korea,
people
 live in
this
 country with no choice. They should think, speak and do the way
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states
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 wants it.
The
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freedom
 of
speech
 contributes to the consolidating trust between
people
 and respect for the opinions of others. Take
for example
 me and my mother. I can say anything to my mother and she is not critic me, because she respects my opinion and it strengthens our trust in each other. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that
freedom
 of
speech
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 very vital in
free
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a free
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society
. But it is very important to understand that every plus has its minus, so
this
 question may remain unanswered for many
people
. But for
me
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this
 question is closed.
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