The diagram below shows how olive oil is manufactured.
The diagram which is given above clearly illustrates how the step-by-step processes occur to deliver quality olive products to the customers.
In general, the making of olive
oil
involves seven different steps that start from picking olives from trees and successfully end with the storage and sale of the olive product.
In the first step, olives harvesting takes place and it will be sent to the rinsing machine to wash with cold water and thus
the second stage. The next step is
shifting the olives to another machine to smash and separate the seeds from the fruits. Then
the olive paste without olive stones is ready to pack in the bag with holes.
Subsequently
, the bags will be sent through a pressing machine to separate the excess water from the olive oil
. Finally
, the olive oil
is ready for packaging. Once olive oil
packaging is done, it will be delivered to the shops for storage and sale.Submitted by duckiedesigner on
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