You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The pie charts reveal
the
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apply
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information about
arresting
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arrests
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which is represented by the proportion from 1989 to 1994 by
genders
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gender
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,
while
the bar graph illustrates the most updated reasons
of arrested
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for arrests
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in percentage which are
drink
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drunk
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driving, public drinking, breach of
order
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the order
an order
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, assault, theft, other reason and no answer.
Overall
,the majority of people
in
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apply
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five years until 1994 who
have done
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were
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the
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illegalities
was
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found in masculine
by
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32% which
more
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is more
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than
one fourth
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one-fourth
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of all men,
while
one in every ten of feminine (9%) did those things.
However
,
the
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public drinking was the largest number of committed causes, which has
reported
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been reported
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in both genders. Even though the offender was much less common than those who were not arrested, in
this
case, men were 23% more likely to be searched. They usually drank in public areas and drove after had dunk, which
were
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was
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more than 25% in cases if compared with others.
While
the maximum of the most recent
arrest
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arrests
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was
fond
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found
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in women who had been drinking in public spaces more
frequent
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frequently
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up to 38% approximately, the assault and other
reason
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reasons
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were only 19% and 18% respectively.
However
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there
was
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were
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a few offenders
in
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both men and women had not revealed the information.
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