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The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries. Write a report for university lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries. Write a report for university lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given Pie charts give information about how three countries (
Sweden
, United
Kingdom
,
Republic
 of
Korea
) control harmful waste products.
Overall
, it can be seen that all the given nations make use of underground and incineration as a means of combating toxic
refuses
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refuse
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.
Additionally
, only one country has more than three methods of managing waste products. In
details
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detail
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, In
Republic
Correct article usage
the Republic
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 of
Korea
, recycling was the most fancy way of curtailing waste at 69%,
while
Sweden
 only
use
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uses
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 it to dispose one a quarter of their debris, and it is not used at all in United
Kingdom
. Next is underground disposal, which accounted for 22% in
Republic
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the Republic
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 of
Korea
, but more than
a
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apply
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half in
Sweden
, a measure
that is
 used to curb slightly above four-fifths of United
Kingdom
jargons
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jargon
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.
Furthermore
, Incineration is a method mostly used in
Sweden
 to Control
abort
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and abort
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one-fifths
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one-fifth
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 of their toxic products, and
this
 doubled the value of
Republic
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the Republic
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 of
Korea
,
while
 it is barely
practiced
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practised
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 in
United
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the United
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kingdom
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Kingdom
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. Interestingly,
United
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the United
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Kingdom
 uses
chemical
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chemicals
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 and dumping at sea in
equal
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an equal
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 Proportion of 8%, methods which are not employed in
sweden
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Sweden
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 and
Republic
Correct article usage
the Republic
show examples
 of
Korea
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, kingdom, republic, korea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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