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in modern times, social media addiction is wrecking havoc on lives of people. What is the cause of this problem and how will you tackle it?

#times #media #addiction #havoc #lives #people
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Nowadays,
people
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 always playing social
media
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 in everywhere. There are excessive addictions to open and cause disaster in the lives of
people
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. In
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 essay, I assume there are many problems that can cause after many times using social
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such
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 as Facebook, Instagram, Twitter, etc. Social
media
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 have many advantages if we use it correctly. But, in recent times, there are many abusive habits that we do not tolerate like scams, phishing, hacking, etc.
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, in Indonesia, we can meet scammers that made fake voices to worry other
people
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. If the target is easily hypnotized, the users can lie to many crimes to take money as much as they can. The operation can be succeeded if they fulfil any needs and the victim is really sad and devastated. There are many consequences to prevent
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 matter. Any government area
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 as police, corps, and government must tackle it together to lower the crime and the damage.
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, the government of Indonesia give an invest so big in State Cyber and Code Agency (BSSN) to prevent many crimes in the future. A community can report the havoc to authorities. So, the authority can be made any excuse for every bandit. If
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 project can make it right, many problems will be solved and crime will be decreased very strongly. In a nutshell, social
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 addiction can be prevented by working together to prevent it. Any stakeholders must care about
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 cause to decrease crime and make
people
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 happier, especially in Indonesia.
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