art should be unrestricted. DO you agree or disagree

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Art has many forms namely music,dance,crafts, and acting.It must be encouraged among people.I completely agree with
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opinion that it should not restrict. First of all, I believe that crafts should be popular in the nation.Because it provides relief and destroys all the worries of mankind.It helps to improve creativity and gives confidence .
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performing in the dias or participating in programs conducted by educational institutions or any other organisations.
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certain measures to develop art for students in school.
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as giving funds to the schools for conducting programs related to the artwork.
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,it leads to good career growth if we excel in it.Humans can earn certain money from them.Nowadays craft is growing everywhere , everyone is aware of it and they are enjoying it since childhood and they
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many scientists did not go for the high paying jobs
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they prefer to do the work they like.
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,era people are most interested in artistry.that's why it is important to earn money as a side hustle apart from the main job.These are the benefits of it.Even though there are disadvantages like if we concentrate more on arts our focus will reduce on studies.
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artistry should be part of life and the advantages of it outweigh the flaws.
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, I strongly believe that art should be developed because
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it provides good employment to citizens and they became famous and probably earn decent money
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it helps them to relax from all their worries and gives them confidence.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artistic expression
  • Freedom of expression
  • Stifle innovation
  • Challenge social norms
  • Provoke discussions
  • Perspectives and interpretations
  • Censorship
  • Suppression of voices
  • Accurate representation
  • Unrestricted
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