The shown Line graph below illustrates the condition of participation by club members to different courses.
The Line graph gives information about the rate of becoming a member
to
3 kinds of clubs namely swimming, team sports and gym activities between 1995 and 2015. Units are measured in percentage.
Change preposition
of
Overall
, over two decades,though,in the initial year
swimming has so many members but by Add a comma
,year
end
of Correct article usage
the end
Add an article
the period
period
it made up the least amount than others. Add a comma
,period
However
, membership for team sports and gym activities increased as compared to previous
situation.
We can see that membership Change the article
the previous
of
swimming was top of the hill in 1995 with around a half, followed by sharply decreasing until 2010, but Change preposition
in
this
figure has been
remained stable over 5 years Unnecessary verb
apply
with
about 15%. When it comes to the level of members of team sports and gym activities, both Change preposition
at
of
lines experienced Change preposition
apply
slightly
rose from 1995 to 2010 which accounted for 40% and 25% respectively,but during the 5 Correct article usage
a slightly
years
these indicators have Add a comma
,years
been
faced slowly a decrease ( with about 31% and 24 respectively%).Unnecessary verb
apply
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