Some people think news has no connection to people’s lives. Therefore, it is a waste of time to read the newspaper and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

A small number of
people
believe that
news
is irrelevant to our lives and we should not spend
time consuming
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this
informationinformation.
This
essay disagrees with
this
point of view. On the one hand, most
of
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ordinary
people
do not connect directly with the
news
. The main reason is, the
information
on the
news
is often events that affect many
people
for example
a natural disaster occurs in a certain area or a flight accident, and when
people
do not directly experience these kinds of events, the
information
would be irrelevant to them.
Furthermore
, newspapers or
news
programs do not deliver
information
on
a specific fields
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such
as the price of some household goods today or an exact payment of a certain job and since
this
is what the major
people
usually care about in their daily life,
news
become
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less attractive for them.
On the other hand
, I think
this
viewpoint has two major problems. First of all,
news
helps
people
know how certain things affect our lives.
Although
it does not give exact data,
news
provides a pattern for a field and
this
pattern is often relevant and can be applied to the majority of
people
for instance
,
information
about coronavirus incidence in
the
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certain area helps
people
improve their prevention of the disease.
Second,
consuming
news
inculcate
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people
’s knowledge in society, which has become increasingly important in modern society. Because of globalization, difficulties or opportunities are no longer limited to a specific country or aspect but rather all connected together.
Therefore
, the more social knowledge one has, the better chance he or she gains in life. In conclusion,
while
news
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is often covered a wide range of
information
for a normal person, in my opinion, it can not be said that spending time on the
news
is useless.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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