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The maps below show how a coastal town developed between 1950 and 2007.

The maps below show how a coastal town developed between 1950 and 2007.
The maps below given illustrates, the before and after of a coastal
town
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, it is proposed redevelopment. During the period from 1950 to 2007.
Overall
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, the comparison of the two maps, reveals a complete transformation, from a less rural
area
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 into a more urban
area
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. In 1950, the
town
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 was greener with a lot of grasslands in the east part of the map. There was a road along the
town
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 from south to north and it ended to a sea.
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, There was an industrial
area
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 just to the northwest of the map and
also
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, a car
park
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 was located in the east part just above the grassland. To contrast, The
town
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 saw significant changes during a period of 57 years. The grasslands were completely removed and replaced by an entertainment
area
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 in the south. In the northwest of the map, the Industrial
area
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 was transformed into a multi-story car
park
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, a swimming pool, and a
park
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.
Therefore
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, the sea was just developed after the yacht marina was added.
Also
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, a residential
area
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 was installed after the car
park
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 was demolished.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, area, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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