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The two maps illustrate the external and internal changes in the design of a health centre that happened from 2005 until the present day

The two maps illustrate the external and internal changes in the design of a health centre that happened from 2005 until the present day
The maps below given illustrates, The before and after of a health
centre
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, it is proposed redevelopments internally and externally. During the period from 2000 to 2009.
Overall
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, the maps reveal a huge transformation in both internal and external parts of the health
centre
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. A residential area in the northwest of the
centre
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 has remained after the changes.
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, the Derelict warehouse and the old town were demolished and replaced by a car park, some offices, and a university just next to the residential space.
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, the art
centre
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 was developed into a cinema. ٌ
while
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, the school war remained throughout a period of 9 years.
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, a residential area was transformed into a shopping
centre
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.
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, the river along the
centre
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 remained, the lake at the north end of the river was converted into a little pond. In the southeast of the maps, a residential area just was demolished and replaced by an industrial complex.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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