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Many students find it harder to study at university or college than when they were at school What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve the problem?

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Humanity
activity
 has seen great progress from the past to the present.
Nevertheless
, statistics show that people's interest in improvement is increasing rapidly every year. It is true that improvement means a lot to free
time
 in our contemporary world. Today, the growing demand for
time
due to
 globalization emphasizes its importance.
This
 issue of
the
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nation
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activity
 is important for some
folks
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activity
, but not important for others, it is left to their own personal opinions. The problem with our modern free
timeis
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time is
 still those who think negatively about information. I think free
time
 spend is important First of all, folk
activity
 it's good for children and humanity.
Moreover
, as some argue, the thoughts of people ... in remote parts of the world prove that ... is not important. One of the main reasons for
this
 is,
for example
, a different way of thinking and a different outlook. If the labour capacity of humanity increases, the development potential will
also
 increase.
Secondly
, I agree that we have several options in terms of alternatives because I believe that ... is not only interesting for me but for everyone. A short experience shows that if we study ..., we should shed light on the path of adults and children with what we learn. In conclusion, it is confirmed once again that information is a useful alternative for the development of free
time
.
In addition
, it is recommended to classify different types of movement and it is important for association
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