n some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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advantages. First of
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you can get rest after your whole 12 years of education journey and you can clear your mind for
university
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and you can go to some volunteering mission that
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from your main language, it builds confidence and reduces social anxiety for your
university
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journey.
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you can work much more for your branch and that gets you much more ahead of your classmates when you'
re
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about to go to
university
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. Some people want to follow their passion and that
gap
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year
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gives em' so huge a chance, they can build their business or what they want to do with their
carrier
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without
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stress.
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of people
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know what they'
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going to build their
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about and that
gap
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year
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gives
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huge chance too because they can find in
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year
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their passion or whatever they need
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the build their
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about
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. Now it's time to get
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my experiences,
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was educating
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class
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was in so
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school projects that gave me so much experience
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electronics and
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. That gave me so
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for
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ahead of my life,
carrier
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and for my business. I'm talking to for who takes a
gap
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year
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they have to go into projects like
this
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or tournaments and
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to
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build their mind about what they'
re
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going to educate in
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.
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think there's no disadvantage
for
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taking a
gap
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year
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except for one thing, you'
re
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getting one age older before you'
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ending your
university
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it may
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be a problem if you'
re
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not building yourself in
this
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gap
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year
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but if you can build yourself it's not even a problem.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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