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The most impotant decision that young have to follow is what career to choose. Do you agree or disagree?

It is irrefutable that a major is a crucial part of youngsters' life.
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 choosing a job is a
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that is
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 the most significant
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. I completely agree with
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 view because of several reasons, which will be highlighted in the next paragraphs. It is an undeniable fact that teenagers are faced with several essential
decisions
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such
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 as selecting a
career
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 path deciding
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 on
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 education or field of study and so on. I believe that
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 there are many
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 in young
people
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’s life a
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 related to choosing a major is the most important among other
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 if young
people
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’s
decision
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 about their future is clear-cut, it won't be tough for them to achieve
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career
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. The
decision
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 to choose a job depends on a variety of factors
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 as family , the amount of income, interest ,
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 inspiration and so on.
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, there are other reasons why deciding carrier path a very essential.
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, it will help
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 to build and identify their self-esteem and self-confidence.
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, the
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 about the prospective major can help improve financial position, avoid debts and maintain
people
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's financial stability.
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, it can solve problems related to money that millions of
people
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 will face these days. What is more
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decisions
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 can assist with making youngsters’ own
decisions
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 and taking their own responsibilities, which can help them to be mature. On top of that, if young
people
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 decide what
career
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 to choose, they will learn more about themselves, I mean their strengths, desires, creativity and motivation which can help them to find their own way in all wakes of life.
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, youngsters can get married to a person who is educated by making
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decision
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 In conclusion, choosing a job plays the most important role for young
people
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. I entirely agree that it is the most significant
decision
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 for them .

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