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Write a letter to your friend. In your letter tell your friend about your planned party ask what the restaurant is called and for directions to get there ask what kind of food it serves and if your friend has any particular recommendations from the menu You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Pat,

#friend #party #restaurant #directions #food #recommendations #menu #addresses
Dear Pat, I hope all is well with you since the
last
 time we met, I have been planning a party lately for my birthday and wanted to know your fair share on an opinion. I'm planning to throw a party for my birthday
this
 year for all my close friends and family, a
full fledged
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full-fledged
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 party with some fun activities followed by a
full course
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full-course
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 dinner. I have had a hard time
in
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apply
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deciding on a venue for the same, as I was brainstorming on
this
, I recalled that you had recommended
me
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a restaurant, I was hoping you would be able to give me more insight about that restaurant in regards to the name, cuisine and directions. I would greatly appreciate your input on any/all food recommendations from their menu, and alongside all of
this
, a very honest and unbiased opinion as to whether or not
this
 restaurant would be an appropriate choice on
occasion
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 of a birthday celebration. I look forward to hearing from you soon and seeing you on my special day. Warm Regards, Sam
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coherence cohesion
To further improve coherence and cohesion, consider breaking down your ideas into more concise paragraphs. This can enhance readability and better highlight each point you're making.
task achievement
For the task response, you could provide a little more detail about the party plans or any specific ideas you have in mind. This can make your request more engaging and comprehensive.
greeting and closing
The letter has a clear and warm greeting and closing, which effectively sets the tone for friendly communication.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is polite and suitable for writing to a friend, maintaining a personal and engaging style throughout.
complete response
The content of the letter addresses all the necessary points: the planned party, asking for restaurant details, and seeking recommendations.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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