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Although countries with long average working hours are economically successful, this often has some negative social consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In some countries working long
hours
 is regarded
the
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 norm. Economic success resulting from long
work
hours
 comes at a price for families,
people’s
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and people’s
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 health and may contribute to higher unemployment. In my
opinion
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 the
long term
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 consequences are
to
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too
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 grave to ignore and an effort must be made to reduce long working
hours
. The most serious effect of working overtime constantly is putting
employee’s
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employees’
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 health at risk and causing illness, early retirement or even premature deaths. When working long
hours
 it is more difficult to maintain a healthy
life style
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lifestyle
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, like finding time to exercise and relax. An unhealthy lifestyle increases the risk of heart disease, diabetes and
stress related
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stress-related
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 illnesses. Being chronically overworked can
also
 cause psychological problems, like burnout,
depressions
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depression
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 or even
suicides
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suicide
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. All these health problems can cause high immaterial and material
cost
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costs
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 to
society
. Another problem is the workforce’s limited time for social contacts and families. Long
work
hours
 do not make a very
family friendly
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family-friendly
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 environment.
People
 may find it hard to raise children and
work
.
In particular
, women may have to decide against working or having children. Because of long
work
hours
, some employees will not find the time for a relationship or family at all and remain single.
Consequently
,
birthrates
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birth rates
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 are likely to fall, which can
for example
 be observed in Japan. A low birthrate might leave
a
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society
 with an
aging
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ageing
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 population and
results
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result
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 in many
hard to solve
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hard-to-solve
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 problems.
Lastly
, companies that require longer
work
hours
 will employ
less
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people
 in total. It is obvious, that if
people
 would only
work
 regular
hours
 more
people
 would be employed
instead
 of some
people
 being overworked and
other
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others
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 unable to find
work
. The
society
 has
pick
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 up the bill for most of the cost of unemployment and the consequences of
people
 working too much. In conclusion, I believe that the advantages of long
work
hours
exists
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 only short-term. The negative effects are a burden to
society
. It would be beneficial if governments and companies understand the long-term cost and limit long
work
hours
 to short-term overflow
work
.
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