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There are two-line chart diagrams depicting changes that the percent of electrical appliance in households in 1920-2019 and the total time of doing housework every week at the same time.

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There are two-line chart diagrams depicting changes that the percent of electrical appliances in households in 1920-2019 and the total
time
 of doing
housework
 every week at the same
time
. For the first line chart diagram,
it is clear that
 the figures are about three kinds of electrical equipment. For the
percentage
 of washing machines, it could be noticed that there existed a slightly increased from 1920 to 1960.
Furthermore
, it increased by 30%. From 1960 to the next 50 years, it kept steady. The
percentage
 of households with refrigerators and vacuum cleaners, as an
overall
trend
, climbed from 1920 to 2019. It should be noticed that the
percentage
 of refrigerators had a more dramatic change than vacuum cleaners. It clearly shows that the rate of using refrigerators had rapidly increased, and nearly 100 per cent went up. The second line chart diagram represents the
time
of
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people
 do
housework
 every week. It shows a quickly decreased
trend
. In 1950,
people
 did
housework
 at least to spend 50 hours, and yet
people
 only spent ten hours on
housework
 in 2019. It was a dramatic change. In conclusion, it is obvious that the
percentage
 of households with electrical equipment is an increasing
trend
.
In addition
,
people
 spending
time
 on homework had a going up
trend
.
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