Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Sports become one of the activities that have been popular these days and

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kind of activity must be supported by the

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. There are some arguments that it is better to build specialised

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even though citizens

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. I believe that anybody needs to be facilitated in their needs as being active by the

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and

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need to be supported. Each sport has different kinds of equipment that can help

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develop which are needed for specialised buildings. There are several advantages if the country has a building or area

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specific for

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. First of all, it can help them to grow and

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. I believe that the occupation as an athlete is not only achieved by themself but the

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has their part with

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proper

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. In South Korea, there is a big area dedicated to their national

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which include a dorm, kitchen, dining hall and several building to

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support

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makes those

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are being valued and feel supported.

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, we cannot forget that

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and being active are not only for

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but for

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, so

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need to take care

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. Common areas have several pieces of equipment to help citizens active, it does not require expensive and extensive equipment for

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as long as can be used by

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of all ages. There are some countries that already implement

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, which are South Korea, Japan and Canada. Those countries built at least one common area in each housing complex so their citizen can use it every time they want and

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because it's near their houses.

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to have proper

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and help them to develop their skills.

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are not only for them but

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

specialised facilities
train top athletes
international sports
boost
reputation
attract
sporting events
access
general public
inequality
opportunities
overemphasis
elite sports
neglect
grassroots development

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Fully explain your ideas

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The number of old people is increasing. Some think this will cause problems for countries while others believe old people still have value. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

In some countries, young people have become richer, healthier, and live longer, but they are less happy. What are the causes? What can be done to address this situation?