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Nowadays, it is not only large companies that are able to make films as digital technology enables anyone to produce films. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Producing films has become very easy in current society, thanks to digital
technology
. I believe it has a positive development rather than
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negative
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.
Technology
 is a factor which changes day by day.
Earlier
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 film industry had only a few methods of techniques to perform and the quality of the output was not much as expected. Digital
technology
 is user-friendly
which
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 is easier to use by anyone. When
comparing
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 to
past
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the past
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 the number of equipment used for
production
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the production
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 of movies was higher.The positive direction of digital
technology
 leads to
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 the number of tools to be used in film production.
For
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the
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human
knowledge
 was
also
 needed for the
process
, but at ,present it has become
more
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a more
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 time-saving task.
This
 is because digitalisation could minimize
the
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labor
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 power.
Steps
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The steps
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 of the
process
 have been focused
by
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 digital tools. These are only a few positive aspects of development in
technology
.
Next,
I would like to demonstrate the opposite aspect of digital
technology
 .Many people believe that with the introduction of digitalised tools,employees who performed their duties lost their job opportunities, and became vulnerable. Producers had a group of people with skills associated with each
process
. Even though they had
knowledge
,they took a lot of time to submit their work.
New
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The new
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technology
 of digitalisation has the ability to handle easily,
due to
this
 people without proper
knowledge
 enter into the industry, which ultimately leads to
release
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the release
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 the movie without
a
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knowledge
. In conclusion, I strongly exemplify that digital
technology
 can allow anybody to produce a movie.,which is a positive development. As mentioned above time and other factors which are directly involved in the
process
 can be benefited from digitized
technology
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