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The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950

The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950
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The diagram depicts the alteration of West Park Secondary School which was
survey
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surveyed
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 in 1950, 1980 and 2010. In general, in 1980 the building focused on
placed
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places
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 that related to sports and hobbies.
Whereas
, in 2010 concentrated
to
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on
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enlargement
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the enlargement
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 of the parking area. in detail, before being altered into a parking area and science block in 1980, the land was fully constructed by residential areas and farmland.
furthemore
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Furthermore
, parking spaces were constructed beside
of
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apply
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the science block in 1980.
In addition
, the secondary school
located
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is located
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 between
main
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the main
a main
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 road and the playground which
have
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has
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 remained fairly unchanged.
on the other hand
, West Park
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is concerated
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concerated
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concerned
on
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with
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 the bigger
size
 of the car space after the
size
 of the parking spaces. The
size
 location car parking was bigger than
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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 field which was smaller than
playground
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the playground
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. The
goverment
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government
 resized the sport place and
playgorund
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playground
. in
based
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the based
a based
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 picture in 1950, which was the
size
 location as same as every block and addition in 2010.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words size with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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