Nowadays,families are not as close as in the past and a lot of people have become used to this.why is this happening?do the advantages of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

As time advances, family relationships
seems
Correct subject-verb agreement
seem
show examples
to be more and more superficial. The bond between
people
in a family
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
show examples
become very thin nowadays and the sad reality is that everyone gets used to it. The reason for
this
phenomena
Fix the agreement mistake
phenomenon
show examples
is the deep desire inside us
for
Change preposition
to
show examples
taking decisions independently by eliminating
unnecessay
Correct your spelling
unnecessary
interference from close relatives. Analysing that it negatively impacts
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
people
by
severly
Correct your spelling
severely
affecting their mental health,
nevertheless
on the
otherside
Correct your spelling
other side
, it
provide
Change the verb form
provides
show examples
the pleasure of independent life. I strongly
Correct your spelling
believe
beleive
Correct your spelling
believe
that the negative sides always outweigh the positive ones Surely,
nuclear
Add an article
the nuclear
show examples
family offers many advantages.
Firstly
, many
people
are attracted towards
idea
Add an article
the idea
show examples
of living with their children and spouse only because of the freedom of taking decisions in life. Mostly, in joint
families
Add a comma
,families
show examples
the conflict of ideas between the younger and older generation often creates problems, which will get solved
being
Change preposition
by being
show examples
far-away
Correct your spelling
far away
show examples
.
Secondly
, with the advent of
technology
Add a comma
,technology
show examples
there are ways for far-ones to be connected to their relatives.
For example
, the facility of video calling anytime and anywhere provides a virtual feeling of
together
Add a missing verb
being together
show examples
, which
thus
keeps the bond active. Certainly,
this
practice has very complex disadvantages too. Clearly, children are the ones who suffer the most. In earlier days, children were surrounded by a number of persons to look after them which by now
reduced
Add a missing verb
is reduced
show examples
to only two, their mom and dad,
whom
Correct pronoun usage
who
show examples
on the other hand
often fails
doing
Change the verb form
to do
show examples
so
due to
their busy lives.
As a result
, childhood trauma is no longer rare since the pleasure of having a shoulder to lean
and
Change preposition
on and
show examples
a gentle
forhead
Correct your spelling
forehead
kiss
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
bad days is taken away from them.
Additionly
Correct your spelling
Additionally
,
focussing
Correct your spelling
focusing
show examples
around
Change preposition
on
show examples
oneself often make
people
self-centered
Change the spelling
self-centred
show examples
which
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
the long run intensively
affect
Correct subject-verb agreement
affects
show examples
their mental health since the luxury of freely venting emotions with family members is lost. The effects of
such
drawbacks are very intense.
To conclude
, we must not forget the fact that human is a social animal. The mere comfort provides by staying away from family is
unworth
Replace the word
worth
show examples
considering the negative sides associated with it. But, modern
people
still blindly
following
Wrong verb form
follow
show examples
the trend fascinated by their near-sighted thoughts. It is
recommemded
Correct your spelling
recommended
to consider the long-term problems before taking the decision to move away with one's own family.
Submitted by devika.mohanan on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: