Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Some humans told that
complete
method to make Correct article usage
a complete
the
Correct article usage
apply
health
stronger is adding a lot of sport
items, for doing Change the noun form
sports
sport
. While
, others, tell that adding the amount of sport
facilities will have only a bit effect on people’s Change the noun form
sports
health
,
and that they need Remove the comma
apply
another methods
to improve the Replace the adjective
another method
other methods
health
.
On the one hand, people who satisfied
with doing sports and Add a missing verb
are satisfied
does
it as a hobby can have Correct subject-verb agreement
do
strong
body, Add an article
a strong
wide
spine. Actually, for Correct word choice
and wide
them
the facilities for doing the Add a comma
,them
sport
is
the Correct subject-verb agreement
are
necesseriest
objectsCorrect your spelling
necessaries
,
because without them they are disabled to do it. Today there are a lot of people who go to the Remove the comma
apply
gym
, and going to gym
for them became Add an article
the gym
as
a hobby. So, they are having strong Change preposition
apply
body
which helps them to feel more confident. Because the reason Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
of
illness can be depressionChange preposition
for
,
when Remove the comma
apply
person
has no confidence.
Add an article
a person
the person
On the other hand
, people can do
Unnecessary verb
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
health
stronger while
they are just walking, running, having cold
bath or even doing Add an article
a cold
the
training for the respiratory system and for Correct article usage
apply
eyes
. These methods are way better than just going to the gym
to do sport
on the special items. While
person
is walking he/she Add an article
a person
the person
breathing
Wrong verb form
breathes
the
fresh air which helps to refresh the brain from the Correct article usage
apply
had
thoughts. When Unnecessary verb
apply
person
Add an article
a person
the person
having
a cold bath he/she makes the body stronger for cold weather. Wrong verb form
has
Also
doing the training for respiratory
system helps to improve the amount of air/carbon dioxide to collect into Correct article usage
the respiratory
lungs
, and special Correct article usage
the lungs
trainings
for Change the wording
training
pieces of training
eyes
helps to keep the Correct article usage
the eyes
eyes
in their best form.
In conclusion, just going to the gym
doesn’t helps
Change the verb form
help
to
someone improve Change preposition
apply
the
Change the word
their
health
, but if that someone does all of that things, namely: having cold
bath, training Add an article
a cold
respiratory
system and Correct article usage
the respiratory
eyes
, walks
outside, and Wrong verb form
walking
goes
to the Wrong verb form
going
gym
, those
Change the determiner
that person
those people
person
will have good health
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