the graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

the graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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The line chart illustrates the sum of
stores
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that have closed and opened during the
years
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2011 to 2018 in one certain country. From a whole perspective, we are seeing a fluctuation in both lines of the graph,
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probably accounts for the instability in the market in these
years
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. Approximately, for most
years
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the percentage of closing shops is higher than the opening market except in 2011 and 2015 when the number of openings is higher rather than in other
years
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.
For instance
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, in 2011 above 6000
stores
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were closed compared with nearly 9000 department
stores
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that opened.
Then
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in 2012,
this
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amount declined to 4000 rather than about 6000 in the shop closures amount; and in 2014 their figure came close together to nearly 6000. In the year 2015, we witnessed a sharp fall in the closure rate which is under 1000 numbers;
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the opening rate is 4000, which means the most difference has occurred
this
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year with 3000 contrast. From
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point, the sum of outlet closings increased again in 2016 and stayed around 5000 until 2018 with marginal changes.
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, the statistic of opened
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remained steadily near 4000 until 2018, when there is a 1000-figure decline in it. .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stores, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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