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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, some believe that the main cause of the environmental problem is the extinction of some
plants
 and animal
species
.
On the other hand
, some people see that we face more serious
problems
 that impact
on
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the
environment
 more. In my opinion,
problems
 like global warming, CO2 and the effect of technology have
greater
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 impact on the
environment
 than the loss of particular
species
 of
plants
 and animals.
It is clear that
 environmental balance is a serious system that was created by God for us. Any imbalance
of
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this
 system causes serious issues
to
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 our daily life.
For example
, in one of the new cities here in Egypt, the
numbers
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 of rats and snakes increased more than normal, because the people in
this
 city have killed the street cats and dogs, which results in an imbalance
of
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 the
environment
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 system.
However
, the extinction of some
species
 may lead to environmental
problems
, but
the
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other
problems
 like global warming and CO2 impact more seriously on the
environment
.
Furthermore
, the pace of affecting the
environment
 is much higher
due to
 global warming, CO2 and
the
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technology than the loss of some
plants
 and animals. As most of the
species
 that we lose from
plants
 or animals have substitutes, and the pace of affecting the environmental
problems
 is slower. Global warming has a significant effect on us and on the
environment
 that we can clearly feel.It is mid
june
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 and it is raining in Egypt, and the temperature degrees have increased more than normal globally. The changes that happened
for
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 the weather affected the crops, some crops
damaged
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 because of the sudden changes.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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